It's pretty good. Short but it flows alright and rymeing at times can make poems excilent. I'll give you a 4
Oh and im not saying you would have gotten a five if you rymed...because you did ryme. yey u!

very beautifully written. you're so talented.
much love, Marjan

great poem 5/5!! very good!

Short, sweet, and to the point. Good ending too. You're awesome!
-Jaime