its good,but u need to edit the ending.

deep. really good poem. xox

A very intriguing poem. Starts off sweet and gentle, then goes off into depression. Nicely made.
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The developmental pain in this piece is just so vivid and growing that I love it.

As sad as it is - it is truly a fantastic write. Indeed the sound resonance of the masquerade we all play fool to is dismal and categorically very fake. I love how you put it in gorgeous, aliterated, words. A beautiful ... yet so suddenly sad [death] of a poem. Not to say that this poem killed herself - but the beauty herself.

Hats off to you. Welcome to my Favorites.

5/5