awesome...

It has a pretty meaningful moral in the end. No one's perfect, no matter what.

WELL GOOD! REALLY DEEP! LOVED IT X plz comment and vote on some of mine x

i know exactlly how this feels my parents pressure me to be perfect and everytime i'd bring home a grade that wasnt good enough for them. i'd go to my room shut the door and cut... or if we got in a fight or stuff like that trust me i know how you feel my parents expect me to be perfect since all my other brothers and sisters screwed up i was getting bad into cutting and i started doing drugs and i was getting really deep in the two i started to talk to a friend of mine about all of this and its been about a month since i cut i still smoke but thats more for fun instead of an escape. feel free to e-mail me if you need to talk to someone address is in the profile.

Please do not cut yourself anymore I understand what u r feeling I once saved a girl from the same thing (she is the girl i love) she was raped at school by a teacher and only I knew because i noticed what was going on. Anyway she taught of suicide but changed her mind when i told her how i felt and how she help save me. Yes i was going trou some hard time myslef my parfents got divorced and my head filled with crazy stuff about leaving home and shit but instead i found her and i kept my mind occupied on how could i help her and make her notice me. This goed for u too u dont know who might need u i n this world maybe ur Boy friends needs u way more than u think so pleased dont hurt ur self and know that there are pplwho care i barely know u but I CARE and i would be here if u need a crying shoulder so just message me on zorpia and ill do what i can *HUGS*

Thats sad.......and also very sweet, i like the structure

Good choice of words. its a steady flow even tho it didnt really rhyme

Raw and real...You have a talent, share it with the world.

Really good job...only one suggestion though....this line

"She know perfect I will never be"

should be

"She knows perfect I will never be"

i know it is a small fix but even things like that can distract a reader....nice job...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

Very deep, but even though it didnt have perfect rhyme or anything, it was still heart-felt.

Good Writing!
beth