wow. ur work is good... but kinda scary...
well done tho xx

This poem is very heartfelt, and I can feel every word in every line, it gave me chills, excellent writing!
please chek out my newest poem "help me" stephy :):)

Wow... Good work but deary, cutting is not the way to go, i've learned In the future you'd hate having the scars, I know I do

wow really great poem keep it up no matter what and always stay strong

it makes me think about my sister she use to do that sort of stuff but she stoped after she got help. great poem 5/5

Hmm...

I have read a lot of poems like this one before, carrying the same message. If i were you, I'd probably (if i were to write about cutting) make the wording more unique. You see, a lot of people write stuff like "i cut to feel" in their cutting poems, or some variation of that. Use your imagination and make the poem stand out from all the other cutting poems.

I've actually said this to a lot of people, but the rhyme scheme seems forced. These lines don't actually hang together that well, the only reason you put the last line was because it rhymes with cold.

"My body gets so numb
my fingers so cold
it feels like I'm dead
just a black hole"

So, just work on that some more. I'll be reading your stuff every once in awhile, and giving some more critique.

Keep on writing,
Dorotea

"and one day i just mite
lose the game that i have been playing
death mite overtake my body"

"might" instead of "mite."

This was an okay poem. I feel like this topic is a bit old, but I definitely liked the format more that just simple stanzas. You rhymed a bit more than I would have liked you to, but the variance in syllables per line was actually refreshing in this poem, it seemed more like a monologue than a stuffy sonnet or anything like that, which seems more appropriate. I think your ideas could use a bit of refining, but it was pretty good nonetheless.

It was a pretty good poem. good job

Great poem. Keep up the good work sweets *hugs*

~Jessica

No offense, but your poem sucks. but no offense!