good writing, i can see your story as it happens.

wow Justin - you have a great way with words. you are an excellant writer and have such good ideas - keep it up bud

You have a great way with words. Your poem really flows well and it makes alot of sense.Your style of writting is different and i really like it!!

great, great, GREAT poem. Absolutley breath-taking. I've always enjoyed the simplicity of poetry, and this is a perfect example. Your talent shows brightly through this single poem...absolutley amazing.

omg! this actually almost made me cry! it makes me think of having to go on to college and leaving everyone behind, and it just....ahhhhh! nice job! keep it up!!!

Moving away, moving on... Excellent flow to the poem, strangely satisfying descriptions of material memories that seem to fit like jigsaw pieces into an identity. The unsettled sense of emptiness at the end closes the piece perfectly.

Reading this has improved my night. Cheers.

-paperdoll