hey this is cindy ur poem is really good i can really relate 2 it u r really talented if thats ur first i really enjoed readin it

Nice work for your first poem. I liked the phrasing and your word choice. Such as sad poem, though. Cheer up (oh yeah, this coming from "Lady Death" herself...)

I love this line: "Everyday I wake up and curse myself for letting the one who loved me more than i hated myself get away."

Keep up the good work. ^_^

Well.. I like the message in the poem alot, I know the feeling exactly. But, some lines where really short and some really long, even though it worked out pritty good in this poem, it's very hard to make it work like that. So a suggestion would be to try and have fairly the same amounts of syllables in your lines:)

Best wishes,
Patrik