Comments : Cynic To The World

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*Ley*~

    awww sweety thats so sad. don't worry matt won't hurt you or ill hurt him
    ~*freak*~

  • 18 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    When it comes to original poems, this was definately one. I don't think I've ever read a poem quite like it, and it's always nice to read a poem with a certain topic for the first time.

    However, I did find a few spelling errors and some other things I feel should be changed. " When your distrusting everyone" You probably meant "When you're distrusting everyone." The same thing goes for "Cuz your nothing but a cynic." Also, use the word 'cuz' instead of 'because' or 'cause' can make the reader think that you're lazy or that you simply don't care. I would change that.

    Overall, I did like the poem. Nice write.

    Dorotea

  • 18 years ago

    by Sapphire

    I especially liked the
    "Ive learned this mask is here,
    to hide behind"
    Or something like that lol. but its a great poem and very original it flows very well. great job and keep writing!