hey this is really good...you used some really good examples...umm the one thing i would probably do is take out the chuckie and tommy thing...it doesn't really fit, even though it is a good example.
otherwise nice job! keep it up!

I liked it, but one line really confuses me "But I can not up stain"

I can't figure out what you meant to write here.

Otherwise, I think you're right...I did pick the poems of yours that weren't your best, lol...

I like this one much better.

really loved your poem well done!! mwAzz stephy :):)

Very creative way of expressing your feelings. I was wondering in the first line if you meant pawn where you have "pone"? The 4th stanza I think takes away from the uniqueness. This line "But I can not up stain" I wasn't quite sure what you were wanting to say. It just didn't make sense to me. I hope you are looking for an honest comment. I am just trying to help. The idea behind this poem was brilliant it just needs a few tweeks here and there. Great idea loved your creativeness. Take Care! Brooke~

Thank you for you comments on my poems I really appreciate your time! =)

I love how you gave a picture of how you feel out of place....especially the cards and checkers...VERY CREATIVE.

You rhymed some stanzas and not some others. I think you should decide one or the other as the unevenness takes away from the flow. I love this poem though...it's so unique.

Very nice write!! :)

good work....really like the way your poetry flows...keep it up, you are very talented!!