Great poem, but it was kind of hard to
follow . You have your words bunched
together . You should try to open up
more and add more feeling . But don't
get me wrong it was great . You also
have a few mispelled words you might
want to correct . I hope my critisim is
not bothering you because I make
those same mistakes sometime . I just
let them make me a better writter . I
hope you write some more soon,
because I would love to read more of
your work .

Your friend
Letty

I loved it!!I know how you feel my best friend is moving away and I do not know how to tell her i am going to miss her!!But you have a good way expressing your self!!grat job!!!!!

I really liked this! It was short and sweet, and its got really good flow.

Just one little typo in the middle, other than that, its a good piece!

Take care,
Lizzy, xxxx