I can almost see the emotion in the poem, although most of the rhymes seemed forced.

That's okay, though, if you're happy with it. All that really matters is that a reader can relate and understand, right? And I definitely did. :)

Please, please, tell me that's not true! It was great and the emotion was just right...is it true?

lovely but sad poem, well written, thanks for voting a commenting on mine, keep up the good work

rach
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thank you for your kind words .. i really liked this poem .. it really made me think ... very well put .. i enjoyed every bit of it .. 5/5 =)

Awwwwww so sad but true n it hits the spot. ur a good writer so never stop can twait to read morebut cant roght now sorry to say ur n my fvas now lol so keep writin so ill have sumptin to look forward to!!!!!! toodles

This is extremely sad. But pain is a part of life, and so is losing the people we love. We just have to learn to move on with our lives, and most importantly live for those who have died for us. I hope all is well with you

Take Care,
Renee

I liked this alot i think some areas were forced but mostly flowed well i could really relate to this up until the person died but just losing somebody close to you...great job 5/5

Aww this is really sad....i really like it though 5/5 deffinately your a very good writer
Ps. I tried to comment on your poem called A wish? or something like that...but anyways OMG it was SO good it reminded me so much of this one night lol like i coudn't have said it better myself! ha i gave it a 5 too!
Thanks for the comment
Becky

So sad but beatifully written! I can totally understand where you are coming from in this poem. Stay strong, i am going to! Thanks again :)

Overall, awesome poem, but the last stanza was confusing... "Now that you're gone, I promise my love for you will never go astray"? thats kinda confusing... like saying if the person was still alive(or there), then you wouldnt love them? im sorry, just a little confused x.x