Great Poem!! I think you should expand it a lil more but i too feel the same way... keep writing... ~Michelle

ThatS sO nicE deaR.... greaT readinG...

I really liked this ,the content is excellent and the rhymes,there are just a couple small things(fere should be fear) and I would drop the (as) in the last line of the second stanza.we all make these kind of little errors but the poem is so good it would be good to correct them.