Purely for your 'oddness' i gave you 5! I have never written a poem like this,so i am in no position to critise or make suggestions about your work, and even if i could i don't think i would on this one! Your style is refreshingly unique and i think maybe i've just been blind to all this talent as all my favourites write pretty much the same... maybe it's time for a change! Anyway i love how you started everything off with a one word question and just the way it flowed, kept me interested and had an amazing and different idea! So honesty you oddness is beautiful and you deserve a 5!

sean that was way beyond beautiful.i think that is too good for words. you don't deserve a 5 you deserve a 10! you are on my favorite list

nar no oddness i love poems like this. that dont fall into the usual style...really strong and really represents a lot....love the references to shakespeare aswel...like most poets i guess they are inspired by such an excellent writer and poet! well done and would love ur insight on some of my poems! take care
xxxLoUxxx

A very personal piece, Sean. I did not find it odd at all; rather a unique write.
The way you wrote it seemed to tie in well with the Shakespearean era which you made reference to. I believe many people are calling you too young to be in love and engaged? Don't worry about this, from what I read you are extremely mature for your age; this poem shows it.
Your last stanza was very strong, I very much enjoyed it.
(although I am no fan of "Romeo and Juliet" as a love story).

This was the first of your pieces that I have read. I found it to be very, very good. I'm not familiar with the style and form that you used, so found it refreshingly odd. And since when was oddness a bad thing? Anywho, A very strongly written piece. Flow was excellent. I agree, your form and style played well with your refrences to Shakespeare. A most liberating write. I applaud you, sir.

Timothy Bledsoe

I think you did a great job! This was very different and I liked the style. Keep working at it because you will do well!