i really like this poem and your word choice to explain this. great job

Thanx 4 the comment,Its nice stuff to read here too,although i think u read a poem that was not my best.But anyways,keep strong,I think trying new things can be a release for a writer,this is gr8 stuff.Respect-IIII,peace\/

very good beginning. the rhyming was good too.
take care,
marjan

nice, i liked the style, and the combination of words seemed to all fall into place. great job!

Its not your best work...

--Nick--

i dont like the way the lines are set up, but other than that its a great poem! keep writing and stay safe, strong, and healthy!
ps: thanks for the comments!

!!!!!!!!!!! THATS HOTT!!!!!!! THAT A HOTT POEM!!!