You don't do it often,, which is good. And in some of your last poems it seemed like you purposely did it, but try to use the passive voice as little as possible. Readers, like to read sentences that are in the active tense more. And too much passive voice can actually make your story or poem or whatever your writing a bore.

OMG I LOVE THIS!!! ur a great writer... u say ur new to it??? i wud never a ben able to tell!!! i swear im fallin in luv wid ya just from readin ur work!! he he he take care :)

*~peace and love~*

I loved the way you wrote this one specially its flow.
take care,
marjan

unique poem!i mean that in a good way,but you should make that into a song,like a heavy metal song,this poem would fit perfectly with a few beats!good work

Great, the best poem I've read in a long time. You're on my favorites.

Wonderful poem. I like the way you write. You are really good!