"But now your gone forever
And my days are left bare"
it should be:
"But now you're gone forever
And my days are left bare"

"No petalled trees or chirping birds
Will you ever find"
I sort of feel like the phrase "petalled trees" doesn't really make all that much sense. It seems like trees can be "leafy" but not really petalled. That seems like a flower thing. Dunno.

"No friends to help me threw this
I'm left without a trace"
it should be "through this" instead of "threw this."

As far as content and rhyming goes:
Hey I think you did a remarkably good job with this poem. It isn't the first of its genre, but it is still original and, of course, very heartfelt. The rhyming was quite good, and the line length was fairly consistent, giving it a very good and solid rhythm. If you're feeling low, you can always look to our poetry club for help, we seem like a pretty receptive and helpful bunch to me. (except for when I'm critiquing poems, then I'm cold-blooded.)

Except for the few spelling mistakes which Sean Allen already pointed out, I found this poem to be surprisingly well rhymed and the flow was consistent indeed. For that part, very nice job.

I've read quite a few poems like this before, but still I feel that this one deserves praise because the poetic structure was well formed. Nice job, I'll also read another one of your poems.

Dorotea

i really like this poem it clearly describes the feelings of despair over lost love , this poem has a great fleuncy that poems of this emotion rarey posess due to the fact that the artist is usually more concerned with describing their feelings than the actual form of the poetry and yet you pulled it off beautifully balancing form and feeling......5/5 (spelling mistakes are not as important as the quality of the poem)

i really felt your fellings it wasa great poem but some mistakes with the words but dont worry about that it will all work out in the end and keep up the great work

i thought that was absolutly awesome, i can't believe how you captured even my feelings in that it's like you can really see exactly how im feeling lol. nah but that was probably one of the best poems i've read in along time
keep up the great work
luv manda :)

This poem felt like it had eyes... because through eyes you can see anything and eyes show exactly how a person feels. I can totally identify with this poem because its written so well with so much feeling. Rhyming pattern is really good and it has a nice rhythm too.
Very good job, keep up the good work

very emotional and mature. i love the use of words which make the piece beautiful. nakkatouch.....