Hey, this is good...i can kinda relate to this, it hurtz i know..*hugz* hope ur alrite, keep on writing and take care..
~Luv Alwayz Knoxy

"False truthes and lies"
the plural of truth is "truths"

"This stories previous closing"
it should be "story's," since you're talking about ownership.

This was a pretty good poem. I thought the lines were a bit short, so the rhyme scheme was a bit tedious since there weren't enough syllables inbetween rhyming words. I thought the rhythm was pretty good. Any improvement to this poem would probably involve a change to the rhyme scheme and an overhaul concerning the syllables per line. It was a good poem.

So sad. I really like this though. How it's all laid out like a story. Very different and new. Nice work and take care darling.