Hey i think its a pretty good song. you should write more! i think it would be good if you change the ending a little bit though but other than that its great!

wow! that was great. the rhyming was perfect all the way thru.

good emotion and expression in this one, try to spice up the word choice to make it more original, it has a lot of potential. very good for a first song, keep it up :)

Its not bad at all, Im just not a fan of people who slit wrists....

To be honest, I don't slit my wrists or anything. I just wrote it, I don't feel that way ♥