hmm..need a little work...its kinda short and kinda gets cut at the ending...but the rest is nice...if you add a little more it could become better..:D

ok, good poem, well thought out, but the ending really threw me off...i don't think that's the right usage of "bleak" and that makes the rhyming seemed forced. bumpy flow, could use a little work. other than that, nice job! 4/5

THis is a nice poem I know how that feels cuz i've gone through that. peace out great job.

I liked it but it seemed choppy and forced at the end