I got your request that you wanted people to read your new poems with your new style that you are trying. Well, your poem was good. You just need to make sure it is not too wordy. For example "The horizon is fading and the silence still defeaning
Praying for laughter but dying for the pain that I am sure the sunlight will bring" The last line has too many syllables it doesn't flow. But, I still think it is a great poem. Keep writing!

an amazing poem. it was filled with thought. keep writing, i love the style. xx