GREAT POEM,FULL OF EMOTION. MY POETRY LIKE YOURS IS FUELED BY EMOTION. I WOULD LOVE TO SEE WHAT YOU COULD DO WITH SOME OF THE OTHER EMOTIONS LIKE EXCITEMENT OR HAPPINESS. GOOD JOB

That was awesome! keep it up!
Samey

Very surprising ending. Catchy beginning. You could still work on the flow.

That ending was wicked suprising the poem could use more.. how do i word this.. flow? i suppose? like it seems more like a paragraph but perhaps i'm not reading it right.
the theme was really cool though