U got the rhythm's down with ur rhyming and flowing,.. id like to see more visuals and imagery,.. metaphors.. but some people dont use that style,.. i myself use it to the fullest.. 4/5

I have been there, been there so much. thx for your comment 5/5

Wow i like that, it feels like it needs sum sort of ending tho.....i like

Nice lyrics they sound really nice

"in a dark room only my four walls
the shadows will loom and i fear i will fall" those lines are very cool and well writen. i like this poem short simple and gets the idea across to the reader well done.

~Jacklyn