I am really diggin' this! I love the imagery and quick flow it has! It's an amazing piece! The emotion is definitely there!

The only tip I have is in this line:

"Purple tears and blacked lies"

It should be either "black lies" or "blackened lies"!

Like I said, other than that it's awesome! Keep it up~Holly

Wow its so very colorful! I am a person who is very in to detail and description.