Hey, good job. Awesome choice of words, keep it up.

WOW.. that was pretty deep n touching.. i especially lykd ur ending.. "and familiarity with pain", that reli touched me the most.. ur rhyme was gr8, and so was the flow
keep it up
nouna

Loved the imagery in this! It was sad and depressing you painted the picture so well! You did an incredible job! Take Care! Brooke~

nice poem!
i really liked it, very creative
5/5

Beautifully sad a really touching poem!

take care

Wow, this was great! so sad but paints a story(Paints?)
It remined me of many things lol.
This part reminded me of mcflys song 5 colours in her hair lol "She lives, in a house
Painted different shades of gray.
Her family, they blend together
With nothing left to say;
It seems, the turned the mute on"

Well the video lol.

And the whole thing sorta reminded me of house of wax, dunno why lol :D

This was really great and they flow completely rocked!

x)

What a boring life...lol Depressing. You painted a picture of gray for all to see. It flowed nicely..Nice write! :)

Very nice i really enjoyed ......keep up the good work......keep smiling

That's very good my dear...I got such a vivid picture in my mind of a little girl shuffling down a deserted road with her hands stuffed into her pockets looking at the ground....I very much liked it. Great job.:)

DarkSuicide

I love how you stuck with the mute theme all the way through, And the rhyming was cool too!loved gotta give it a 5

Hi gr8 poem5/5 the rhymin was gd and it was very easy 2 get a picture in ma head 1s again gr poem.Awesome choice of words, keep it up.
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This is very unique I'll say that. Of course I've heard depressing poems about not being heard or understood, but this one was way better than most. Right from the second line "different shades of grey" you paid attention to detail and captured the emotions of the reader, that's very important. The ending was very strong too "Except an appreciation of color
And familiarity with pain" it worked very well. The lines are fluent which is essential in this sort of poem.

The only problems I have are a couple of spelling mistakes. In the 5th line it should be "...they turned the mute on."
Also on the 7th line it is spelt "soulless."

Very good poem. I enjoyed it very much.

Very understandable. i know friends of mine that are going through the same thing. they have even written similar poems like yours. excellent job.

Very sad poem, but the feel is great. Your words express such tragic imagery. Nice work. Keep writing.

Very good poem, I liked it a lot. HAs great feeling and emotion. Never lose the ability to write w/ feeling its amazing.

~~Sweetie

I loved the idea of the mute and silent movies, it was unique and interesting! It flowed amazingly well and keep my attention! I really enjoyed it! 5/5

Awwwww.... if u want, u can read my poems, too. it might help you understand, that u aren't alone. if you don't want to, its ok. its up to u. hope u feel better. im here for u ... if u need anyone to listen.

big hugs, love always,
michelle

This is nice. it didnt nessecarily click but it was well written and the feeling is easily understod.