that was prety amazing, too.. i lykd how u repeated "in just one second", tho it seemed a lil boring.. hhe.. i loved how u concluded ur poem.. i wonder y no1 read this or commented or voted.. :)
anywayz.. keep goin
nouna

wohoo i loved it

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Powerful poem. I loved it.

Wow, you have a great talent. I like poems with the repetitive beginning. It adds strength to the poem. I like the last line the best. It was a wonderful way to end the poem. Definitely not expected, but very good! 5/5. Keep writing, you have talent!

~BJ~