It needs work? No, I don't think so. It's perfect....It flowed so well and was so filled with emotion. Writing about past memories especially ones you so enjoyed is easy...in reading this it seems as though the words came to you with no problem. It seems as though it was very easy for you to write as it didn't struggle with rhyme or flow at all. So nicely done.

I like how this one painted a nice summer picture in my head. Nothing to suggest, I like it very much.

This line made me laugh:

"one of John and James boxing
that was an interesting time
the advice the guy gave James
wasn't worth a dime"

Let me guess......

James didn't feel so manly afterwards? Haha...

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