Well written clever metaphor

Hey you were at the back of the list but i really like it keep it up

Bad points: think you should change the layout slightly!

Good points: thought it was VERY good!! n thought the title was intrestin!

Score i gave you: 5, i really liked it!

This carries an excellent flow. The words are meaningful and rich, giving the verses an extravagent air.

Very well thought out, deep. A pleasing read.

Cute.
there was a few spelling mistakes in there but other than that good poem =]]

Wonderful description and comparison good job

ashleigh