woah liz....this is like the koolist

This is good, but I think it could do with some work. It doesn't flow amazingly well. The line 'As she sits in bed mumbling "I'm alright" "I'm alright"' is really powerful so maybe you could repeat it somewhere else? Maybe at the end. Just a suggestion. Still worth the read though. x

That was a really good poem. Very full of emotion and feeling. Keep on writing and take care.
><> Kiesha

i really liked this one really gud but i m not sure about the tittle it didnt really glimps the work ......just an idea.... but i really liked it
thnx 4 commentin on mine
xxooxxoo love always jaz

Wow... 5/5, I disagree with purple fears very much so,I thought this poem flowed amazingly and was very sad but had very good description and I could imagine it all in my head, I can sort of relate to this poem so if thats how you feel I understand what your going through, but I think you are an amazing poet, and you did an excellent job on this one and i'm sure the rest, great job and keep up the fantastic work, your poem caught my interest very much so and kept it instead of losing me in the middle like most poems, again great job and i'm expecting to read more excellent poems of yours,

One of your readers,
X3_Miss_Understood_X3 aka Jess