THe first thing I noticed was that the first line lacks one syllable, and that it says heatless instead of heartless in the seventh line...

As for the poem, I like it...The message within it is well presented, and you manage to tell what you wish to tell in an interesting way...

Despite it's nature as a nonet, it has a nice flow (i don`t usually like the flow within nonets), and the words fit well in...

Every word contributes somehow, and nothing seems unecessary...

good job

I'm loving the message and the style is great. I have about ten pages of partial nonets that I've attempted. I either begin them great and can't end it or I have a great ending and no beginning, it's crazy!
EOB said it all, I have no further suggestions! Take care~Holly

Although the poem form does not allow a long poem, the message that the poem carried was very meaningful and more should read it.

In my opinion you did a superb job!

Warmest regards,

Steve