Comments : An Answered Plea

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Ok, well all I can say on this is it made me cry :|
    It was excellent, no sign of forced rhyming it just flowed and you can tell how much you miss her, its like looking trough your eyes onto your soul.
    This expressed a great amount of feelings,well done it was great.
    I really loved the flow and words in this "When you held me tight
    I began to silently cry
    Tears that went unnoticed
    And then went to dry"
    It was written great:D

    x)

    Keep it up xx

  • 18 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    WOW! This was so beautiful! It flowed sooooo well and everything was just perfect! I loved this line:
    "I poured my heart
    Right into your soul"

    AMAZING WORK! I loved it!
    ~*hAiLy*~

  • 18 years ago

    by Stacinator

    I really like the flow of this poem. It's very touching. Keep up the good work, I gave it a 5. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenTessa

    Ahhhh, that was a really great poem. i like the way that u described ur feelings, at the time.i can truly realate, because i know excatly how it feels. if u feel like it u should read my poem *shadow* thanx
    5/5
    *keep smiling*
    `~*Tessa*~`

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    You had some good lines but i felt some had too many syllables so it disrupted the flow. The title matched the poem and was good because it was the idea behind the poem but didn’t give away the last line which is important. My favourite stanza was :

    "I poured my heart
    Right into your soul
    Slowly our lips linked
    And we became whole"

    It portrayed some magnificent emotion and worded perfectly. I felt the idea behind the poem you truly had a grasp on which helped portrait what you felt. Good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by ~Black*Rose~

    I really like this poem. It is deep. There were a few moments when it didn't flow smoothly though. I got lost a little in some parts. If i could sugest in your next poem reading it in the point of view of another person. But i really liked it. My favorite line is "Still yearning, every second
    Begging to be with you
    Because forever and always
    I don't want to be through"
    Keep writing I love it i gave your rate a 4/5