The second stanza, 8th line, 'you' should be 'your'. Other than that... I like the concept of this poem. good job, keep up the good work!

Wow, this poem really was beautiful, another piece of art from you, each poem you write brings up many new ideas and different stories, well done to you, this was really powerful and I really felt the emotion of the person talking, I could imagine so many people reading it as I read it aloud..

This stanza was fantastic
"Please child, you’re my only one,
I love you so much, I can’t explain,
Please child my only child, put down the knife and bottle,
I see your cries for help and now I’m here for you"

Wow, well done to you and keep up the good writing..

take care
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I like the way you have written this; It is almost like a desperate plea for somebodys salvation - yet a warning of the guilt that can/could be inflicted if such acts were committed. (I make no sense sometimes)
Anyway hun, take care, much love,
Always.

-Kals.