That piece i really like, its simplistic and even explains itself at the end, for once i can't critique

Wonderful! my only suggestion is to try and do stanzas, the first was a lil shaky, but you ended it pretty good, so definately a 5/5!!

Wow amazing poem....5/5 nice work....wonderful....luv yas mwah

-kayla-

I think I already commented on this one but i read it again, and enjoyed it immensly the second time around

Oh wow! thats a sad ( but very good ) poem!! i enjoy your writing so much. its very origional. whenever i read your stuff, i always expect the unexpected, and i suppose thats a good thing. keep up the amazing work! :-)
~Hard2Heal

"he found a way in,
simplified your life.
you stumbled on the way out
slipped, but he took the fall,
right upon the knife."

really love that line...it means alot to me. You are really great at writing poems and you truely rock. Great job keep it up.