Comments : Day In, Day out.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lenny

    That piece i really like, its simplistic and even explains itself at the end, for once i can't critique

  • 14 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Wonderful! my only suggestion is to try and do stanzas, the first was a lil shaky, but you ended it pretty good, so definately a 5/5!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Kayla

    Wow amazing poem....5/5 nice work....wonderful....luv yas mwah

    -kayla-

  • 14 years ago

    by Lenny

    I think I already commented on this one but i read it again, and enjoyed it immensly the second time around

  • 14 years ago

    by Hard2Heal

    Oh wow! thats a sad ( but very good ) poem!! i enjoy your writing so much. its very origional. whenever i read your stuff, i always expect the unexpected, and i suppose thats a good thing. keep up the amazing work! :-)
    ~Hard2Heal

  • 14 years ago

    by prepkiller

    "he found a way in,
    simplified your life.
    you stumbled on the way out
    slipped, but he took the fall,
    right upon the knife."

    really love that line...it means alot to me. You are really great at writing poems and you truely rock. Great job keep it up.