Beautiful poem hunny. Fantastic superb work. Can't say enough. I love the stanza about Nathan. Simply beautiful poem darling. I can't wait to read your next master piece.

All my love
Kel

This is a great piece
ur rele gd at it
i could never write sumthing like that..
if u could.. pls check out ma poems
thanx
stay strong and smile always

"a blanket of black balloons", "heartless heart of hearts". These are all excellent.
"My life story. It's sixteen storeys because I'm sixteen years old." now THAT'S what I call a literary device. These little devices you use, that makes this poem good, without them, I would have disregarded this as "ordinary".
I love your poetry, more than i love the poetry of Robert Frost or Emily D. This has life, and emotion. Well done!

Tiffy girl.. holy crap.

This is a fantastic peice, the imegry and devices you use really add interest and depth making a brilliantly consturcted peice of writting.

5/5

You certainly do have the writers gift. Just incrediable. Keep up with your dreams, you can make it, you have a lot of talent and it shows through every line. Just amazing work!

In this one i really like ur word choices, they r great. 5/5

....Well-Done....

Its intelligent, but you lost me a couple of times. Reading your explanations really helped me out, thanks ^_^

Excellent write, for we are like a pendulum,swinging side to side,,never know where we are going ,just going for the ride.....but a grand plan is destiny and it is all writ out ,only the Lord knows HOW IT TURNS ABOUT. Your poems are well thought out , I admire the work.Certainly you have great talent.

Wow, this was quite simply an amazing read!! i really loved it. I love the emotion youve placed in it, and the flow was good, and good vocabulary used. I love the story underneath it, i was really enjaged form the begining. This stanza was my favorite;

"Follow the shooting star into the sun
and yield yourself to nuclear beams
used to hold up a blanket of black balloons
which we call a midnight sky."

i odnt know it just created a really great imager. SO yeah an amazing read, keep it up!And tahnk you for your comemnt! xx