This poem is very good

~*That was really good and sad to...i loved it*~

Umm lol. it was good but didnt have much of a flow. you could have told the story better and made the rhymes more rhymey lol.

I think it's a good poem. I like the story and the way you tell it. You could have made it rhyme which would have made the flow better, but then again I like the unique style you've written it in. Nice work =D
5/5