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Quite an interesting piece. I love it how you try out new techinques and interesting ways of getting thoughts across. You amaze me :D
- Love yah heaps girlie.
Take care aye, hope you're doing alright :)
Hehe a cute and playful poem with a slightly dismal charm. very nice :)
by PnQ Mod Account
I think the title is fine. Very good, in fact. I love the imagery you use... except it makes me feel all icky and wanting to turn the A/C up!
Sorry to nitpick, but since it's a form poem, I have to.
The last stanza is missing a line. It should be abbaA, and you have abaA.
All in all, it's a very good Rondel! Just liek with my own form poems, I like it more each time I read it!
by â€ JustAriâ€
Thanks so much for the correction, Ann Marie! :D I'll be fixing it soon. :P
Nice fix, Ari! You've inspired me to try a rondel!