WOW! That is more than words can say! It is a great great write. I think it could be even better is you made it longer. You know draw out make it more visual! But you did a great job on this keep it up!

Marie

An interesting read, it has some strong and some interesting lines. It keeps you in suspense, which is good and maybe there should be a part 2, that would certainly be interesting and I would love to read it if there was.
One point is this line:
"You open and read it without out fear."
I don't think you meant to use "out" twice.
You have an interesting and a unique style which is always refreshing and enjoyable to see.
Keep writing, you have some good ideas.