Comments : My Suicide Note

  • 18 years ago

    by TeArS R FaLLiNg

    Hey this was so so sad, hope you are okay xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Good start. Not a finished poem, but the foundations are there for a good one.
    On the first line, third stanza it should be "to."
    Also, when you say "gotten" it seems clumsy and it would read better as "got."

    The stanzas you have are good, but you should add a few more details to the finished piece. The lines flow nicely into each other and the rhymes work nicely too.

    So far so good. This poem should be great when finished, keep up the good work!

  • 18 years ago

    by wendy

    Short and to the point i like that please read my new poem ......true blue thank you

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    This is good and I liked the first stanza..finsih it because its a good start! Also there are some spelling errors. Well done xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by amelia

    Great work tell me when u finish i'd like to read