Hey i loved this one xxx

Wow! This is great!! I really loved the words used throughout it. It makes it really intresting. Well done and keep it up!! Thanks for commenting on mine by the way. xx

Weak voices, limp hands

Hands clasped in prayer

[Using the word "hands" so close together sort of drags the poem down. Maybe you could reword this part.. Up to you though.]

I'm lost for the meaning of this poem... at first I thought of soldiers fighting in war at sea or something? Eh, I dunno. Tehe. It was written nicely, and I liked the fact that this poem actually makes you think for a deeper meaning. It was great. Keep it up.

Natalie``

Personally i didn`t really like this one cuz its so sad a depressing.. i don`t really like poems like that.. so its hard to read them.. no offense or anythingg.

I'm not sure what it is entirely about but the iagery was very vivid tothe point it became unsettling to read (Mark of a good writer)

Wow! This poem is sooo amazing! It flows perfectly, no doubt! The imagery was great too, and all in all the poem was well written! Keep up the outstanding work! 5/5!!

=D
xxEvilAngelxx

So sad, my friend. this poem was awesome, very depressing though and kinda wierd but i loved it all the same
xxxxxx

Wow, very sad and depressing, yet wonderful. This poem makes you think a lot and that makes it interesting to me. Good job with this one! 5/5 Keep it up!

Innoc3ntStar

Oh gosh!! this is sad and very grousome to think about but you made it an image in my mind which was good so nice job!

Wow again the words wee so effin twisted and dark. I loved this. really and truly you are a great writer, with a pure talent. the word chioce showed deep strong emtions, and the imagery was beillantly ivvid. 5/5 once more.

Veryy good. This poem was excellent. It was oddly confusing, yet crystal clear.

My favorite lines:
They end their lives with knowledge
Of what comes after death
A place of peace and happiness
When they breathe last breaths

Great job!! 5/5