Hey this poem was beautifull..
so sweet..
it had a great ryme to it..
but all relationships start off like sh...
butta at the end its all worth wild..

Awww that was so good, thank you for an excellent read.

Goth,

Good job. ; ] I do not come across a love poem written for a wife usually. She should have been impresssed.

Your flow is very . hm... how to say it... . it is conceptually correct but your choice of words have not improved the floe but rather hindered it. I think tha tyou have a good idea of wha tyou want to say but your expression could have been better.

The Cocnept is good but you could have improved the situation to procude more effect, what I mean to say is that you couls have been more of a visionary and put a bit more of imagination.

Your tenses are a bit off and I do not like slangs Theres, Thats, didnt, fourth(this is my personal opinion), especially since you have punctuated the poem good enough.
In the lines
"Its never been the same,
From that moment on,
When I asked you to marry me,"

'F' and 'W' should not be capitalised as they spoil the flow.

Totally, you have good concept; just put more time to details and language.

Amazing poem! I read it three times. The rhyme is great; it doesn't sound forced at all----The emotion is wonderful and the flow is flawless! no doubt a 5/5--- =D

This is really a very a beautiful poem. Coming from your heart. Written to a true love. Your words are truely beautiful.

I love it. It made me smile =D And by the way. Thanks for the comment. And I don't live with my dad so it makes it all better! 5/5

~Shae

Wow! thats really all that i can say, wow! excellent job, well done, bravo! (all i would change, and i'm not sayin you should, is not to add a comma after every verse, let it flow whithout pause)

Narc xxx

I wish i never broke up with my girl. i made a big mistake. this poem was so her! .

Awwwh, I thought this was really sweet.
It flowed very well, and the imagery was a joy to read.
I enjoyed the wording and rhyme scheme, it fitted perfectly.