This is a good poem but im not sure i quite understand it correctly

Okay the rhyme scheme is improving immensly because now one actually exsists im not all great at this myself but im trying to improve...words like floor and door...fall and wall....mind and kind....arn't the most difficult words to rhyme try using a better vocab perhaps....

i left up my shirt.
just a few attached to my skirt.
*i didnt get it....whats attached to your skirt?*

because tonight I'll be dead.
like the pointed needle of lead.
*okay i dont understand this at all yes a pointed needle of led (which you spelled wrong*led) is dead but what relevence does that have to anything at all??

it was a good idea i enjoy reading cutter poems even though that sounds weird its very enjoyable your ideas are great your rhyming is improving...and i love to be critisized as well so feel free to fire it right back at me sweetie....good job!

It is good i like it