I just love your flow wish i could flow like that your really good. keep up the amazing work 5.5

5/5 excellnt... i had a friend who was this way too... probably wud get my friend to read it !! good work !

Thanks for all your comments. I really appreciate your words. Your poems are impressive. I like this one a lot, very fluent, and effective. Good job!

Well i really kinda liked this one. I mean i guess dark poems or anything isn't my thing as much i mean i hardly wrote about that but anyway not me it's you mmm this poem was great but personally to me i would give you a 4 but because i didn't like it much but to me and i'm in a good mood anyway i'll give you a 5 because you had this poem right on. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

It thought it was very good, very good flow give it a 5

"Wow your really good"
should be "you're" not "your"

"what a great thing to have to grow up around
all these wonderful ways
to make one feel tied and bound"
this stanza only seems to have 3 lines, while the rest have 4. is there a missing line somewhere?

Okay, so you stuck to a consistent rhyme scheme of ABCB, which is a pretty good one because it allows for some variation and breaking up of the rhyme. In some cases, however, I think your rhymes negatively influenced the flow of the poem, which is to say they didn't provide any new thought and they sometimes involved convoluted sentence structures. That means that sometimes the last line of each stanza sort of repeats what has already been said, but only slightly changes it. This is a common problem with poems that rhyme, because when you're trying to make a rhyme, you think less about the message of your poem and more about just finishing your rhyme. Maybe if you put a bit more time into some of the last lines, they would carry meaning themselves. One last line that I thought was a good one was the very last line of the poem, because it carries within itself a meaning that wasn't already mentioned in the stanza it belongs to.

Wow.. that was gud.. u seemed pretty heated up about that someone, whoever it was, and ur poetry sounded gud ther.. ur rhyming was also gud..
plz keep on writing
take care

I like the way you've got straight to the point...

wow, you're really good
for a while, you had me fooled

You don't take ages to get to get into your reason behind the poem.

xxx cici xxx

This poem reminds me of my mom...
I like it 5/5.
JJx