WOW. A great reminder to why you're on my fav. list. Any way that was definately great job. Amazing ways to convey what you wanted to get across. My fav. line "You speak in tongue of the Devil's mouth,". It did a great job of showing how decieving and tricky that person can be. I'm blown away each time i read your writing.

You are one of the best writers, expecially for dark poems. very good at capturing people's attention. Great job

Hey thanks for commenting on my poetry and your comments mean alot to me.

My fave verse in this poem was the first. I'm not sure why. It is a very unusual image that is conjured up and it works very well. Your last stanza works really well without the rhyme from the other 2 verses making it stand out, and again works tremendously so well done!

Jemma