Comments : The end of the world

  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    This poem is good although i think you could make a lot of changes to make it better. - first try with the beat and match syllables that will give you a start hope to read this poem again and see how its different.
    much love sarah

  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    Wow you did do alot with this poem i really like the changes you made and the last 4 lines are beautiful. such a touching poem.