Umm i don't understand how that could have a 4.5 rating, see thats the thing wrong with these rating's, most of the time there never accurate, but this is a REALLY REALLY good poem, it had a wonderful flow, the rhyming was awesome, long but it showed how much work and time you put into it,

I only suggest you find a rhyme for this line,

"Angel tear me apart limb from limb,
Spread me throughout this earth,
Do it now ..Oh please,
I beg of you do not falter,"

That was the only part in the poem that didn't rhyme, but it still was amazingly good, you have real talent, great job, and of course I give you a 5/5.

Very good poem...I like the way you write...It read smooth all the way through...5/5...I also would like to thank you for voting and commenting on my poem as well...i meant alot to me...thanks-again, jen

I liked this one alot it

I tried to succumb,
Give in to the light,
But my eyes have adjusted,
To the solid black of night,

that was my favorite stanza great job 5/5

Great poem sweetheart, I love your word choice & the twists and turns throughout the story are beautiful! Loved it!
Maiya

Great flow, great rhyming, great strucutre, great stanza's - I would write down my favourite . . .but I would have to copy/paste the whole poem into this comment! Amazing poems . . .

Peace. [Sole]

Hey well i read ur poem and its bad and i mean bad as a relly good one but i mean this poems is really good so umm yeah keep it up oh and check mines out some time