Comments : The one you love

  • 18 years ago

    by Allison

    This one has a good content, but you might want to work on rhythm a bit more.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kayla

    Russell that was a real sweet one keep up the good work hun

  • 18 years ago

    by alwaysremeniceus

    I love it... i think its what everyone chases after... something to look for and find in life :)
    5/5

  • A sleepless night
    Turns into a waking day
    Looking at the sun that is so bright
    All your fears wash away

    I love this stanza!! Rhyming seemed a bit forced but other then that it was good!!! I really enjoyed reading your poems!! Take Care!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Meggie33

    Umm i just liked it all, i find it hard to tell a poet how to improve when i see the poem as flawless, as long as the meaning and emotions are noticable, why change a thing? i loved it, great job!

    **meggie**