Comments : What I cannot forgive

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    I love this poem. its very good.

    however, could i sugest you have another look at the lines

    "You stole the life I could've had,
    And that just makes me sad and mad!"

    i dont know what it is abotu them but they dont seem to flow like the rest does.

    other than that a brilliant poem.