I thought it was good i didn't understand the part about the door and the mantle but it still was very good

"to everyone will see more then me."
it should be "than" not "then"

Interesting poem. Once again, it would be much easier to understand if there weren't periods where the lines weren't supposed to end. Poetry has commas and run on sentences as well, it does not require a period at the end of every line.

Not bad...this is your best 'flowing' poem yet...Very touching. Keep it up my dear.

DarkSuicide

Good job, I liked it, it had a nice flow and was kinda sad.. keep up the good work and thanks so much for the comment on mine, it meant alot to me, I'll try and check out some more of your poems when I get the chance, 5/5

I like that

its a lot of EMOTION!!!!!!

GREAT JOB!!

5/5