Out of all of your poems I think this is the best one. I'm not basing this on content, I'm basing it on fluidity and movement, as well as poetic style. Don't take this poorly, I mean it as constructive criticism: most of your poetry lacks poetic style. They don't flow or move. They are missing rhythm. Rhythm is what makes a poem a poem; not stanzas, not lines, not a lack of punctuation....rhythm. It is everything. And this is one of the few that have this rhythm, this fluidity. Overall, you poems just need to have that fixed and they would be five star. Anyway, this poem is awesome, the wording is great and I can relate to it. It flows smoothly. Please take my advice or at least consider it, don't take it the wrong way. I mean it all in the best interest and friendliest of manners.