What's this doing in explict poems? Yes, it deals with alcohol. But the message is far from just alcohol. Excellent subject, very eerie, and quite effective. You might try cutting this into lines and stanzas, which would help readability. It's a shame to scare people away from such a beautiful poem. Cheers and keep up the great work.

Mercedes

Okay I had to read this like four times and I still don't completly understand what happened to the dude in the car...but I think I did get the message and its beautiful and this was very well written but if you reads these you NEEEEEED to break your poems into stanzas it sucks when im all into the poem and I lose my place...i have to highlight as I go just to keep track of where im at...so yeah please start doing that it would be great

5/5

Aww... Sad again =[ Good though, I really liked this one. 5/5

`natalie xx