Very good had emotion in it your very good 5/5

I noticed you have alot of lovey dovey crap...I hate lovey dovey crap at times but I make some as well.This one is very very raw.I give it a 5/5.Keep it up.

Loved it! nice ending. ur a great writer, u hav talent! jesx

Aww, its sad, isnt it. But you gave it some passion that i loved.
Keep it up
Tara-Kay xxx

At first I thought that he was in the hospital and you were mourning him, but as it was, I still liked it.
Also that you said I'd break something for you, and I thought you were talking about a vase or something, and then I realized that you probably meant a bone, or a heart... Nice.

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You really pull the reader into the character's head. Very good job. unique style for his poem too.

Great job, i love your writing. 5/5 jesx

Ok I've noticed you poem's stanza's are just a bunch of words thrown together. Try making each stanza the same size. It not only helps the reader read it better, it also makes it look more organized. Used capitolization and use commas, periods, ect. No critisism just advice.
Very well done though I really liked this poem. God Bless 4/5
Sorry I gave you a 4 I just couldn't really grasp the poem very well and it didn't really flow to me.

~Tay