Comments : Do they realise?

  • 20 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    They do not realize the pain they cause me
    That night after night I cry myself to sleep
    That finally the pain took its toll
    And the tears I could no longer cry
    That they had helped me to create a plan,
    That was stirring in my soul

    i think this part could be better, my english is not good just thought it will sound better, maybe you should ask an expert.

    They do not realize the pain they've caused me
    Night after night I cry myself to sleep
    And finally the pain took its toll
    The tears that I could no longer cry
    Helped me to create a plan,
    That was stirring in my soul

    I hope the sentence i've corrected is right, you are a great poet. 5/5.

    LOVE...PEACE...:-)